Proto:Pikmin 2/Space Mail

This is a sub-page of Proto:Pikmin 2.

Less Than 3000 Pokos

The President

Demo	Final
Our future is dependent upon your efforts, so check your Treasure List regularly. I'll check in often... Keep up the pace!	Our future depends on your efforts, so check your treasure hoard regularly. I'll check in often. Keep up the pace!

The Treasure Hoard is referred to by an earlier name, Treasure List. and is no longer in capital letters.

Demo	Final
There's nothing left to repossess, so HA!	Besides, there's nothing left to repossess, so HA!

Demo	Final
Just remember, sitting back and watching from afar makes for a boring life!	Remember, you'll never get anything done if you sit back and watch from afar.

Demo	Final
Louie: It's been three months since you joined our company. Isn't it what you'd call "cool"?	Louie: It's been three months since you joined our company, and I'm sure you love it.

The President's attempts to connect with the youth aren't present in the final message.

Demo	Final
Olimar! I see that you're making notes in the treasure list. This is no scientific jaunt! It's business! Which is why the ship is making sales pitches for your finds.	Olimar! I see that you're making notes in the treasure hoard. This is no scientific jaunt! It's business! Which is why the ship is writing sales pitches for your finds.

Another instance of "treasure list" instead of "treasure hoard".

Demo	Final
Sometimes I think of where we'd be now if I hadn't been so stingy... If I'd purchased space insurance... But the route Louie took was always a safe shipping lane...	I wonder where we'd be now if I hadn't been so stingy and purchased space insurance... But the route Louie took was always a safe shipping lane...

Olimar's Wife

Demo	Final
My dearest dear...how are you? Your boss gave me this space-email account and told me of this business trip of yours.	My dearest dear...how are you? Your boss gave me this space e-mail account and told me all about your business trip.

"Space-mail" changed to "space e-mail". Space.

At Least 3000 Pokos

The President

Demo	Final
While you two are dawdling about, my life is hanging by a thread! Get to work, slackers!	While you two are dawdling about, my life hangs by a thread! Get to work, slackers!

Demo	Final
Louie, your auntie sent me some cookies. Now, I only meant to taste one, but...then I ate them all. Sorry. To make up for it, I shall officially make you a Cookie Specialist.	Louie, your auntie sent me some cookies. Now, I only meant to taste one, but...then I ate them all. Sorry. To make up for it, I shall officially make you a Cookie Specialist.

Demo	Final
Some say that one should look to the past, to places one has been already, in order to make new finds...	Some say that you should look to the past, to places you have been already, in order to make new finds...

Rewritten to sound less awkward.

Demo	Final
All I do now is take calls from debt collectors. Thinking it was OK to work at a leisurely pace was a big mistake. Work isn't about quality, it's all about speed. Go to it!	All I do is take calls from debt collectors! Thinking it was OK to work at a leisurely pace was a big mistake. Work isn't about quality, it's all about speed. Hop to it!

At Least 5000 Pokos

The President

Demo	Final
Olimar! You're my hero! You've erased half of our debts. Still, things have become a bit dangerous, so I'm going into hiding. Make sure to focus on work...and don't slack off!	Olimar! You're my hero! You've erased half of our debt. Still, things have become a bit dangerous, so I'm going into hiding. Focus on work...and don't slack off!

"Debts" is no longer plural in the final text.

Demo	Final
Hello... I am still on the lam from debt collectors... For the time being, I've decided to live under the bridge, but if they catch me, I don't know what will become of poor me...	Hello... I am still on the lam from debt collectors. For the time being, I've decided to live under the bridge, but if they catch me, I don't know what they'll do to me...

Demo	Final
I finally have. I'm thinking maybe I'll just fire you two ingrates and hire these nice animals...	I finally have. Maybe I'll just fire you two ingrates and hire these nice animals...

Demo	Final
Today, a group from the government offices paid me a visit. They whisked me out from under the bridge as if I were trash.	Today, a group from the government offices paid me a visit. They kicked me out from under the bridge as if I were trash.

Demo	Final
Today, I just missed getting nabbed by the debt collectors. I was able to escape them thanks to the diet my wife suggested I go on. You should try it, too!	Today, I just missed getting nabbed by the debt collectors. I was able to escape them thanks to my all-grass diet! You should try it, too!

The President's previously mention of eating grass comes up again in the finalized message.

Olimar's Daughter

Demo	Final
Dad! Dad! Thank you so much! Mom is giving me allowance again!	Dad! Dad! Thank you so much! Mom is giving me an allowance again!

Grammar fixing.

At Least 8000 Pokos

The President

Demo	Final
Today, I tried building a small room at the top of a tree. It reminded me of my younger days, when I lived in a little shed. Remembering those days makes this bearable.	Today, I tried building a small room at the top of a tree. It reminded me of my younger days, when I lived in a little shed. Those memories help make this bearable.

Demo	Final
If I don't pay off the company debts right away, I'm to be buried in Hocotate swamp. It's bleak here... Please hurry!	If I don't pay off the company debt right away, I'm to be buried in Hocotate Swamp. It's bleak here... Hurry!

Hocotate Swamp was changed to a proper name.

Demo	Final
hostage in my place. I'm going to run....uh, I mean, I'm going to search for treasures. Hurry, now!	hostage in my place. I'm going to run....uh, I mean...search for treasures. Hurry up!

Demo	Final
Olimar! You are slow as molasses. Effective now, I'm reducing you to a bottom-rung employee until you get back on pace! Seems Louie has more promise as of late...	Olimar! You are as slow as molasses. Effective now, I'm reducing you to a bottom-rung employee until you get back on pace! Lately, Louie has held more promise...

Demo	Final
Olimar! I believe in you! Hurry up and get these debts repaid!	Olimar! I believe in you! Hurry up and get this debt repaid!

Standard "debts" change.

Demo	Final
I wonder just how many days have gone by since I was captured by the debt collectors. Olimar... Louie... Please... I'm almost done for... Repay..the.. debt! P..l..e...a...s...e...	I wonder how many days have gone by since I was captured by the debt collectors. Olimar... Louie... I'm almost done for... Repay...debt! P...l...e...a...s...e...

Debt Repaid

Louie's Grandmother

Demo	Final
Louie! Are you eating well? When you were just a little boy, you were a bit skinny side, so I made you eat healthily. Be sure to cook suspect foods before eating them!	Louie! Are you eating well? When you were a boy, you were quite skinny, so I made you clean your plate. Be sure to cook suspicious food before eating it!

Louie was changed from eating healthily to eating heartily.

Demo	Final
You hated to play outside, so I made you walk and eat bugs and plants. Ah, memories.	You hated to play outside, so I made you eat bugs and plants. Ah, memories...

Louie wasn't forced to walk in the final game.

The President's Wife

Demo	Final
Why you... Some president you are! I just got back from vacation to find you're on a treasure hunt! Well, don't bother coming home until you've found every item on your list.	Hmmph! Some president you are! I just got back from vacation to find out you're on a treasure hunt! Well, don't bother coming home until you've found every item on your list!

Olimar's Wife

Demo	Final
Olimar, you've worked so hard! Your special bonus arrived today. This is a first isn't it?	Olimar, you've worked so hard! Your special bonus arrived today. This is a first, right?

Olimar's Son

Demo	Final
Oh yeah! Oh yeah! My allowance doubled! And it's all thanks to my Papa!	Oh yeah! Oh yeah! My allowance doubled! And it's all thanks to my papa!

Demo	Final
Lately, I've been getting a lot of strange mail from a funny address. It's from a strange lady asking me to be her friend... It really freaked me out. What should I do, Papa?	Lately, I've been getting a ton of mail from a strange person selling designer items at cut- rate prices. It sounds like a deal. Should I send them your bonus check?

The spam message that Olimar's Son talks about switched in the final version to be funnier.

Spam

Demo	Final
I want to meet someone like you. Contact me at http://www.nintendo.com.	I want to meet someone like you. Contact me at http://www.pikmin.com.

The website was changed from nintendo.com to pikmin.com.

Demo	Final
Do you like DESIGNER ITEMS AT CUT-RATE PRICES? Then come save tons of pokos at... http://www.nintendo.com.	Do you like DESIGNER ITEMS AT CUT-RATE PRICES? Then come save tons of Pokos at... http://www.pikmin.com.

Website was changed again, and pokos was properly capitalized.

Louie Rescued

Olimar's Wife

Demo	Final
Hey, hon! I'm on a solo vacation right now. Beach during the day, theater at night.	Hey, hon! I'm on a solo vacation right now. Beach by day, theater at night.

Olimar's Daughter

Demo	Final
Both mom and brother slept through it, but not me! Aren't I proper?	Both Mom and Brother slept through it, but not me! Aren't I proper?

Demo	Final
Brother is always crying... Being a lady stinks.	Brother is always crying. Growing up isn't any fun at all...

The final sentence was softened a bit.

Olimar's Son

Demo	Final
I was a little nervous, but I got over it. Next time, you totally have to come with us!	I was a little nervous, but I got over it. Next time, you totally have to come with us!

Demo	Final
Where did our nice Mama from before go?	I want the old Mama back...

Different sentence, but same sentiment.

All Treasures Collected

Olimar's Wife

Demo	Final
I think I may have messed up, darling... I lost a small fortune buying lottery tickets. It was all a nightmare. We may have to live a little lean for awhile, I'm afraid.	I think I may have messed up, darling... I lost a small fortune buying lottery tickets. It was all a nightmare. I'm afraid we're going to have to live lean for awhile.

Olimar's Son

Demo	Final
I'm not sure what the reason is... Love, maybe? Anyway, hurry up and come home, and don't forget to bring souvenirs!	I'm not sure what the reason is... Love, maybe? Anyway, hurry up and come home, and don't forget to bring souvenirs!

Demo	Final
Dad, today I'm writing on behalf on Bulbie. Mom and I completely forgot to feed him. He got skinny, but he's been eating a lot of PikPik carrots, so he'll be OK.	Dad, today I'm writing on behalf of Bulbie. Mom and I completely forgot to feed him. He got skinny, but he's been eating a lot of Pikpik carrots, so he'll be OK.

"Behalf on" was corrected, and Pikpik was capitalized differently.

Spam

Demo	Final
Not just songs; songs of love! Listen to the greatest hits of Pikpik and get happy! Pikpik! http://www.nintendo.com.	Not just songs; songs of love! Rock out to Pikpik's greatest hits and get sappy! http://www.pikmin.com.

Standard website change, "happy" changed to "sappy", and an extra Pikpik was removed. Pikpik!